I made an appointment for 9:30 this morning at the writing
lab. I was, honestly, not too excited about this, but now I am so glad I went.
It turned out to be a great experience, and I would not even mind going back
again before the final draft is due. Thirty minutes was a short time to go
through my whole paper, but we spent the time well. First we decided on what we
would work on because of our time frame. I did not bring and introduction or
conclusion, but we did work on those. She gave me some great ideas for both of
them. She told me to go through my paper and underline the most important
sentence in each paragraph. We started by reading through the paper and fixing
errors that stuck out. She did some reconstructing and reorganizing which will
definitely help my paper be clearer. I told her I was struggling with the
counter-argument of the paper so she helped me with that as well. We came up
with a clear argument that I am confident about. My topic was somewhat unclear,
but now I know exactly what direction my paper will be going. Now I will go
back and correct all of the obvious mistakes. I will then reorganize my
paragraphs and do a little bit more research on my counter-argument. I also
struggled with the tense that I would use because I was switching off very
often. She explained how to fix that and what would sound best where. We added
a few paragraphs so the word count should not be a problem. My paper went from
around seven paragraphs to about twelve paragraphs. This is a huge improvement
already. The only thing I am concerned with now is citation issues. She helped
me get the right idea about that as well because my in-text citations were not
looking so good. I definitely realized I needed to look up in-text citations on
Perdue Owl. The writing center is most definitely something I will use now throughout
my college career. It has improved my paper drastically. This experience has
made me think about things I would have never thought about before. My writing
is improving every day and the writing center is another great step in helping
this process. I am excited about getting this paper written and seeing the
improvement reflect on my grade.
My First Week- second semster spring 2012
Tuesday, March 13, 2012
Wednesday, March 7, 2012
Outline
Savannah Wiles
Outline
3/7/12
Research Paper-Outline
I.
Introduction
1. Hook:
A brief quote/statistic about fatal accidents involving alcohol.
2. Thesis:
While some may think alcohol does not alter their ability to drive, it is
proven that many fatal car accidents involve alcohol.
3.
Implications: Why does alcohol affect the ability to drive? Where does age and
driving experience play into alcohol-related car crashes? Are teens more likely
to be involved in these crashes than those above the legal drinking age-21? Do
DUI laws effectively prevent people from drinking and driving or are they
useless?
II.
Background on Alcohol
1.
Clarify what alcohol is and where it came from.
2.
Describe some background on the medical complications due to absorbing alcohol
in the system.
3.
Explain what alcohol does to the brain and how it affects motor skills as well
as other skills.
4. State the
drinking laws including DUI's and the legal drinking age.
Sources:
Phillips, David P., and Kimberly M. Brewer. "The Relationship between
Serious Injury and Blood Alcohol
Interview with a state
trooper- Ross Ragsdale
III.
Why Alcohol? - Counter argument
1.
Describe why people consume alcohol.
2.
Describes the risks they choose to take when they do so.
3.
Explain why someone might drink and drive.
Source: Barbour,
Scott. Alcohol: Opposing Viewpoints. San Diego, CA: Greenhaven, 1998.
Print.
IV.
Alcohol-related, fatal car crashes
1. Name
statistics of car accidents, car accidents involving alcohol, car accidents
that involve alcohol and are fatal.
2.
Compare statistics of alcohol related crashes above legal age with those who
are below drinking age.
3. How
these crashes affect peoples' lives
4.
Analyze the photograph and how it uses pathos to appeal to your emotions
5.
Discuss what might have happened in the photograph and argue that point
Source: Ellwagner,
Steven J. Young Driver Accidents and
Delinquency. New York: LFB Scholarly LLC, 2006.
Print.
V.
Conclusion
1.
Summarize the arguments of the paper
2.
Conclude why I believe people should not drink and drive
3.
Restate the evidence which supports my opinion that people should not drink and
drive
Thursday, February 23, 2012
Friday Research
My trip to the library was successful
today. I actually have not been to the library yet this year so I did not know
much on researching and renting books. I started by asking a librarian for some
help on where to begin researching my topic. She was very helpful in assisting
me and teaching me how to use the online library. She taught me how to look for
opposed views when looking for an article and how to search for a book specific
to my title. She also taught me how to limit my search so that I could retrieve
information that would be helpful when writing this paper. I found many books
and many articles on my topic. The first book I found was "Alcohol
Opposing Viewpoints." This might help me get a better view on how everyone
around us perceives alcohol, whether it is abused or not. I also got a book
called, "Current Controversies in Alcoholism," because I want to be
sure to make a fair argument on drunk driving. "Alcohol, young drivers,
and Traffic Accidents," was another book that may be useful to me, but it
could also be a little biased. I will have to be careful with this source. The
last book that I will take a good look at is, "Young Driver Accidents and Delinquency."
This book is another one that I might have to watch out for just because it
could be biased toward young drivers. It could also contain some pretty good
statistics that may be useful to me. When searching for articles I tried to be
specific and found some interesting points. I will probably use an article
called, "The relationship between
serious injury and blood alcohol concentration (BAC) in fatal motor vehicle accidents."
I think this will definitely be helpful in stating my statistics to help make fair
judgments. One more article I found that may be useful is, "DUI Laws are Discriminatory
and Do Not Prevent Drunk Driving." This will definitely give me a good
view on the other side of my argument. During my research paper I realized I
did not give enough views on "the other side" of drunk drivers. This
time I will make sure to research both sides, the good and bad, of alcohol and
make a clear point. Overall, this library trip helped me tremendously and I
have all I need to write my annotated bibliography.
Extra Credit
Last week our
English 105 class took a trip around campus. As a class we visited P211.T45,
the Friday Flyers, and the Foucault pendulum. This was a great experience. We
learned many things about each one of these important aspects of Clemson. My
favorite was probably the Foucault pendulum. This was my group's task to
research. Researching the pendulum was interesting to me because I have not
heard of anything like this before. I really did not even know this was on
campus even though I passed it many times. This shows just how little attention
we, college students, pay as we are walking around and getting to our classes.
The Foucault pendulum was created by Dr. Albert R. Reed who was a physics and
anatomy professor at Clemson University. The pendulum bob is balanced by turning
down a lead cylinder cast around a steel rod to a 9.5-inch diameter sphere.
This is capped with two brass hemispheres, the lower of which held a permanent
magnet. The magnet is a component of the kicker system designed to overcome the
damping of the swing. We also learned, on our field trip, that the pendulum
uses Faraday's Law. The precession rate can be calculated from apparent forces
in the rotating frame on the surface of the Earth. The swing plane should make
a complete rotation in 23.9/sin(latitude) hours. For Clemson’s latitude of 34.7
degrees, this is 42 hours. Typically, the precision rate for our pendulum is
about 36 hours. We all learned a great amount on this field trip and had fun
tricking people with our facts.
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